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The bar chart belows shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart belows shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information about the proportion of Australian households of different gender and ages who did
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general physical
activity
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, exercise in 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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men
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 population in Australia had a decreased
rate
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 of doing normal physical
activity
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 ,
while
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women
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 in Australian households were increasing gradually in 2010.
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, the percentage of
women
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 in households who were 45-54
years
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 old was the highest percentage which was 53.3%. In comparison, the highest
rate
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 of
women
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 who do
activity
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 was much more than the largest
rate
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 for
men
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, which was 52.8% (15 to 24
years
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 old).
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, there experienced a close
rate
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 in ages 65 and over
years
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 old for
women
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 and
men
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, 47.1% and 46.7% respectively.
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 the proportion of
men
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 doing physical
activity
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, the least
rate
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 was in the age group of 35 to 44
years
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 old which was 39.5% and it was a different data that compared to
women
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's percentage at 13.0%.
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, the number of
women
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 in Australia increased growth when they are older, but for
men
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, there was a declining trend
instead
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words activity, men, rate, women, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • regular physical activity
  • percentage (%)
  • age groups
  • gender comparison
  • Australian demographics
  • bar chart
  • trends
  • peak activity levels
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • vigorous exercise
  • moderate exercise
  • age bracket
  • physically active
  • statistical overview
  • exercise habits
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