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Coins and paper money will soon be replaced by credit and bank cards. Eventually we will have a cashless society which will be safer and more convenient for everyone. Do you agree or disagree

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In
this
 present world, Most
of
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the peolple
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peolple
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people
 don'
t
use
 cash
to
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for
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the transaction
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transaction
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 and will have
a
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 plan to replace it
to
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with
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an e-card
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e-card
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e-cards
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. We
use
it
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cash which will be more
surcure
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secure
 and beneficial for everybody. I strongly believe that it would be useful when
people
use
 it.
However
, it will
impacted
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 folks by using its
out of control
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.
Firstly
, human
being
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beings
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 utilize
e-card
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e-cards
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 to buy something
such
 as stuff,
books
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and books
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 immediately.
Although
 the outlets
from
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are from
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 around the world
but
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it doesn'
t
 matter the long distances and concern about how can they
paid
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this
.
Moreover
, they don'
t
 need to exchange your currency
to
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 other
countires
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countries
.
Beside
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 that, we don'
t
 need
care
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 much
how
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can
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they can transit
money
due to
 the bank
help
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 us to guarantee it . Because It's exchanged by the banking.
For instance
, they ought to buy some books from France and don'
t
 need to bring cash to
paid
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these
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. And they just
use
 some
plaforms
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platforms
regard
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 to
banking
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the banking
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 industry and
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the manulating
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manulating
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manipulating
insulating
process
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processes
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 simply to complete paid.
Secondly
, there's the other hand.
People
use
 it out of their control
lead
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 to bad debts. They can'
t
affort
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afford
 to pay interest.
In addition
to
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, they can'
t
 enter the system to transit
money
as a result
from
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forgeting
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forgetting
 their password and even they steal
money
 from it.
For example
, we have many cases like these in Vietnam,
people
 waste
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ton
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tons
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 of
money
 to buy something they don'
t
 really want in
retail
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the retail
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 market and lost
money
 from
unauthority
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the unauthority
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 access system of the bank.
Therefore
,
theses
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these
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 points are
potential
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a potential
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risk
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risks
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 in the future.
To sum up
,
people
use
 internet banking
to
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a transaction
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transaction
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. It's useful and convenient.
However
, it's
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