The graph below shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart describes the gender ratio of staff members who
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to the
accademic
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academic
faculties of a leading college in 2012.
Overall
, the number of departments where there are more
male
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males
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than female is larger than the opposite case,
while
a few faculties have more women. The male percentages
of
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in
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business, engineering, law, and science surpass 50%,
in particular
, in
engineering
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,engineering
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there are over 4 times more male members than
female
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females
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. Regarding business and science, there is
the
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similar difference, where the number of men is twice as big as
female
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females
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.
However
, the law
faclty
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faculty
does not have a so significant gap as the other since the variance between the genders is approximately 20%.
On the other hand
, a majority of people in
arts
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the arts
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, education, and medicine section
is
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are
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female. In
education
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the education
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faculty, a remarkable gender divergence is observed, and nearly 4 times more female is involved than male,
while
the rate
gaps
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gap
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less
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of less
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than 20% can be seen in
arts
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the arts
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and medicine
departmant
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department
. The medicine faculty has
almost
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even
gender
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a gender
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ratio
although
the female number is slightly higher than
male
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the male
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.
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