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The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.
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The first chart below illustrates the percentages of
women
 and
men
 in a particular country who took part in some kinds of
house
 chores (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and fixing the
house
),
while
 the second chart describes the amount of time spent by each gender on each task per day.
Overall
, the females mostly involve in chores like cooking and cleaning,
while
 the males mostly take care of their pets and repair their houses.
Moreover
, the
women
 in
this
 country spend more time on home tasks than
men
. As for cooking and cleaning, the females' involvement was 20% higher than the males'. When it comes to pet caring, both genders take part in it almost equally.
However
, the percentage of
men
 who are involved in
house
 repairs is 10% greater than that of
women
. The
women
 spend over 20
minutes
 more than the
men
 on cooking and cleaning. On pet care, both genders spend around 20
minutes
.
In contrast
, the
men
 spend nearly 20
minutes
 on
house
 repairs,
while
 the
women
 spend about 5
minutes
 on it daily.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men, house, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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