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The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.
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The first chart below illustrates the percentages of
women
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 and
men
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 in a particular country who took part in some kinds of
house
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 chores (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and fixing the
house
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),
while
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 the second chart describes the amount of time spent by each gender on each task per day.
Overall
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, the females mostly involve in chores like cooking and cleaning,
while
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 the males mostly take care of their pets and repair their houses.
Moreover
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, the
women
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 in
this
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 country spend more time on home tasks than
men
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. As for cooking and cleaning, the females' involvement was 20% higher than the males'. When it comes to pet caring, both genders take part in it almost equally.
However
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, the percentage of
men
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 who are involved in
house
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 repairs is 10% greater than that of
women
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. The
women
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 spend over 20
minutes
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 more than the
men
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 on cooking and cleaning. On pet care, both genders spend around 20
minutes
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.
In contrast
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, the
men
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 spend nearly 20
minutes
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 on
house
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 repairs,
while
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 the
women
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 spend about 5
minutes
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 on it daily.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men, house, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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