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Nowadays, with the growth of technology, it is being used more and more widely to teach students instead of traditional methods of teaching. While I believe that this new way of teaching offers positive opportunities for both teachers and learners, I think the drawbacks that it provides outweigh the benefits.

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On the one hand, using technology in teaching makes the lessons become more lively. Nowadays, with the support of various
softwares
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software
such
 as Powerpoint, lectures can become more dynamic by adding many factors like pictures, sounds or videos.
As a result
, learners can study more enjoyably and effectively.
Moreover
, new electronics provide
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students
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more flexible way to learn. Many working people or students from all over the world can join courses
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this
 new way of learning.
For instance
, many computer programmes
such
 as Zoom, Discord or Google Classroom
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help
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users to learn from home without a fee.
On the other hand
, teaching with the help of technology still brings many downsides
such
 as easily distracting for learners. It can be seen that a number of surrounding factors can affect learners' concentration like many social media or entertainment platforms.
As a result
, learning online can not be as effective as traditional learning.
Moreover
, trainees can get in trouble relating to
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technical ones. Online classes can be distracted by the lack of many applications
such
 as cameras or microphones or the instability in Internet connection. In comparison to
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 learning, these issues can not be caused. In conclusion, I think the benefits of
this
 new way of learning are undeniable,
however
, the harm it brings is still a big problem
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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