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The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries.

The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries.
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The table graph gives information about
food
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consumption
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 in four different countries.
Wheat
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,
maize
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 and
rice
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 are the three basic
food
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 for
consumption
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.
Overall
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, the
people
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 in Egypt had the highest
consumption
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 of basic
food
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 with the exception of
rice
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. Cambodia, Egypt and Mexico had great numbers of calorie
consumption
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 in
Maize
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.
However
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, Poland had no consumers of
this
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food
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. In detail,
rice
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 is the most consumed
food
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 of Cambodian
people
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 having 1445
calories
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 a
day
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 per individual
while
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 Egyptian nationals eat 501
calories
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 of
rice
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 a
day
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. The dwellers of Mexico and Poland showed little interest in eating
rice
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 as their daily calorie intake is at 57 and 19, respectively.
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, a different trend is seen for
wheat
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 as it is the least consumed
food
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 of
people
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 in Cambodia at 18
calories
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 a
day
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 as compared with their
consumption
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 of
rice
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. A huge difference in figures as well for Mexico at 275
calories
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 a
day
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. Residents in Egypt had the greatest calorie intake for
wheat
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 among other countries at 1095
calories
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 per
day
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 for each individual. Followed closely by
people
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 in Poland consuming 865
calories
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 of
wheat
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 each
day
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.
Furthermore
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, the preferences of each country vary again in regard to their caloric
consumption
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. Mexican nationalities is the highest consumer of
Maize
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 having 1083
calories
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 a
day
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 per person.
That is
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 more than half of the Egyptian
people
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 consume 578 daily
calories
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 each individual. Cambodia consumes
maize
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 far more little at 103
calories
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while
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 Polanies do not eat
maize
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 at all.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, consumption, wheat, maize, rice, people, calories, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • basic foods
  • wheat
  • maize
  • rice
  • countries
  • comparing
  • analyzing
  • trends
  • factors
  • influencing
  • patterns
  • implications
  • health
  • nutrition
  • solutions
  • food security
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