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The chart gives information about how much energy of different categories produced in France over the period of 5 years.

The chart gives information about how much energy of different categories produced in France over the period of 5 years.
#information #energy #categories #france #period #years
The given chart gives data about how much
energy
of
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 different categories
produced
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was produced
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 in France
the
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over the
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 period of 5
years
.There
are
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is
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energy
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the energy
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of
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in
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 5 categories.They are gas,coal,
petro
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petrol
,nuclear and
other
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others
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. Looking at the graph as a whole,
petro
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petrol
 is the biggest change
of
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in
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 5
years
 and
the
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apply
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gas and coal are all
most
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the most
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on
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apply
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change
of
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in
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 5
years
. Coal proportion was the biggest of
another
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other
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energy
 in 1995 and 2005. In detail,gas was about
1
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a 1
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% increase between 1995 and 2005,
also
 coal was around 1% from1995 to 2005.Both
energy
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energies
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were
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apply
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remained
all
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apply
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most constant at about 30% from 1995 to 2005.
On the other
hand
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whereas
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apply
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a
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the
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 petro was
10
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a 10
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% increase between 1995 and 2005.And
a
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nuclear was around 4% rise,
also
other
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another
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energy
 was 5% increase the
priod
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period
 of 5
years
.As you can see,
coal
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the coal
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 proportion was the biggest of
5
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the 5
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categories in 1995 and 2005,
then
other
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the other
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 proportion was the lowest of
5
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the 5
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categoriesnfrom
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categories from
 1995 to 2005.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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