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There are many things that can motivate people to perform well in their work. These can include the salary, job satisfaction or the chance to help others. What do you feel is the best motivation to do well at work?

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There are many things that can make
people
 enjoy their
work
 and perform their duties well at
work
. Obviously, each of us chooses the main goal of success in
work
 individually,
nevertheless
, I believe a combination of a good
salary
 and job satisfaction is the best motivation for most
people
 these days.
Work
 continues to be a way to get
money
 since ancient times and the financial part of
a
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work
 is extremely important because the more we earn at
work
 the more activities we can afford and the better standard of living we get. Good income provides a quality life with good medicine,
with
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interesting free time and journeys. So, I suppose a lot of
people
 find a good
salary
 as a strong motivation to perform well in their
work
.
However
,
money
 is not the only reason to do your
work
 well. There are lots of
people
 that earn huge
money
 at their
work
, but don’t really like or even hate it. In
this
case
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 a person feels unhappy and dissatisfied and
subsequently
 retires and loses
money
. You have to strive to be satisfied with your
work
, to feel happy with it. Job satisfaction is very important, it may be even more important than a big
salary
 as you are happy.
To sum up
, a combination of a big
salary
 and job satisfaction is
a
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key to being motivated to perform well in
work
. I strongly believe that it is a flawless way to be happy and
well motivated
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well-motivated
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 with your
work
.
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