ome people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to get a satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Job
is so important so if someone asked me
change
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a
job
or
keeping
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it to get more valuable
experience
Although
I agree that changing jobs may bring some benefits ,
i
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I
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think that keep doing a
job
for a long time can bring
people
satisfying career life. There are
have
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apply
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a lot of things
make
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that make
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some
people
change
a
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from a
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job
at
this
time to a new
job
such
as salary,
job
perks,
position
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and position
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,...And there are
also
many other reasons why they choose to quit their present
job
such
as wanting to have more valuable
experience
,
being
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and being
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able to apply the
experience
from their old
job
to a new
job
to be exposed to different roles.
than
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then
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earn money to take care of their family.Another reason is that by
to
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changing
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change
a
job
people
may stand a chance of experiencing various working places,
for example
, if some
people
dislike some ideas in
your
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their
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old
job
they want to
change
a new
job
to find more variety in
job
and from there they
gaining
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gain
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new
experience
and progress more quickly.
However
, staying at a
job
for a long time can bring you many other benefits
such
as
promote
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promotion
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in a
job
. When another company
decide
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promote or dismiss anyone, they will
to
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apply
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consider
of
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apply
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experience
, devotion ,
motivated
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motivation
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and
engaged
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engagement
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to choose.And
more over
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moreover
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, your salary will increase
follow
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following
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year you
doing
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do
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a
job
, keep doing a
job
can help you build a network of contacts. In conclusion,keep doing a
job
can help
people
more valuable
experience
and satisfying career life than
change
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changing
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jobs.
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