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The given line graphs illustrate percentage of households with electrical appliances and time taken to do housework during the years between 1920 and 2019.

The given line graphs illustrate percentage of households with electrical appliances and time taken to do housework during the years between 1920 and 2019.
The given line graphs illustrate the percentage of households with electrical appliances and the time taken to do housework during the years between 1920 and 2019. We can infer from the graphs that the number of
hours
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 spent in a
week
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 doing housework had decreased steadily
due to
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 the increased use of electrical appliances in houses had increased dramatically throughout the given timeline. In the
year
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 1920, none of the houses had a refrigerator, which significantly became popular in 1940 with nearly every second household having one, and by the
year
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 1980, almost every household had a refrigerator.
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, every home had a vacuum cleaner by the
year
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 2000, which earlier in 1920 was at only 30%. 40% of the households at the beginning of the timeline had washing machines, which increased linearly until 1960, with a small drop of nearly 10% during the period between 1960 and 1980, and
subsequently
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 continued to increase
further
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. In 1920, nearly 50
hours
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 of time work was spent on housework every
week
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 by an individual household, which significantly declined until the
year
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 1960, at 20
hours
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 a
week
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 with the increase in the use of electrical appliances.
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, in the later years, the time spent continued to decrease steadily, which reached a lowest at 10
hours
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 a
week
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 by the
year
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 2019.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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