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Nowadays, some employers think that formal academic qualifications are more important than life experience or personal qualities when they look for new employees. Why is it the case? Is it a positive or negative development?

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In recent days, many business owners think academic qualification is more important to hire employees rather than life
experience
 or personal qualities.
While
this
 has several benefits, I strongly disagree with
this
 statement.
To begin
 with, employers believe
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the person
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person
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people
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done
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 their academics are
intelligent
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as well as
 quick learners than
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experienced
persons
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.
Individulas
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Individuals
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technology and
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current market affairs these skills may provide new ideas to
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employers which
leads
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 to
expand
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 their businesses.
for
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giant
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80% employees
are passes
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 out students in "Anna university" because they have a
lot
 of skills and
also
 up to date.
Likewise
,
managements
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 strongly believe, a student
spend
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lot
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 of time and
efforts
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 in order to get
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 university degree which shows the person had
lot
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 of
hardwork
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hard work
 and
disipline
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discipline
. In my opinion,
this
 is a negative development.
While
, academic qualifications are one of the
way
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skilled
labors
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,
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 who had
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lot
 of
experience
 in their fields
are easily handled
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 the problem when it's come. Many
employs
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employees
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 who had
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various degrees still face difficulties to handle their clients because of
lack
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 of
experience
 and skills.
For instance
, “the Hindu” newspaper published most of the engineering students in India are unskilled that's
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one of the primary
reason
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 why they lose their jobs.
Moreover
, personal qualities are
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 essential factor that needs to be taken into the account.
Workers
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 loyalty play the important role in
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business growth. Trustworthy
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 are as much as (important) as
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qualified workers. In conclusion,
although
, employers hire the
academic
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 qualified people might have some benefits, I strongly disagree with
this
 statement. Good
experience
 and personal qualities are much more important than
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university qualification.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standardized measure
  • specialized expertise
  • dedication
  • long-term goal
  • higher education
  • practical skills
  • adaptability
  • problem-solving abilities
  • communication skills
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • homogeneous
  • diverse perspectives
  • negative development
  • inequality
  • valuable skills
  • insights
  • balanced approach
  • proficiency
  • safety standards
  • candidate's profile
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