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The chart below shows the percentage of males and females with higher education qualifications in five countries in 2001.

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the bar chart compares the proportion of males and females having higher
education
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qualifications
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 in 5 particular nations in the year 2001.
overall
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,
while
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 the figure for
women
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 pursuing higher
education
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 was higher than that of
men
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 in the US and Germany, Japan, Switzerland and Britain followed an opposite pattern in the given period. turning to the detail, Switzerland's
men
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 took higher
education
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 accounted for 45%, which was slightly higher than the figure for
women
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.
women
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 got higher
education
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qualifications
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 in japan was only 20%, compared to over 25% males students.
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, the percentage of
men
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 who had higher
qualifications
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 reached 35%,
whereas
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 the category of
women
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 was over a third.
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, in the united states, the number of
women
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 who preferred getting higher
education
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 made up 40%, in comparison with only 35% of
men
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. The figure for females having higher
qualifications
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 in Germany was far higher than its males. reaching 45%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, qualifications, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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