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The chart below shows the percentage of males and females with higher education qualifications in five countries in 2001.

The chart below shows the percentage of males and females with higher education qualifications in five countries in 2001.
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the bar chart compares the proportion of males and females having higher
education
qualifications
 in 5 particular nations in the year 2001.
overall
,
while
 the figure for
women
 pursuing higher
education
 was higher than that of
men
 in the US and Germany, Japan, Switzerland and Britain followed an opposite pattern in the given period. turning to the detail, Switzerland's
men
 took higher
education
 accounted for 45%, which was slightly higher than the figure for
women
.
women
 got higher
education
qualifications
 in japan was only 20%, compared to over 25% males students.
additionally
, the percentage of
men
 who had higher
qualifications
 reached 35%,
whereas
 the category of
women
 was over a third.
in contrast
, in the united states, the number of
women
 who preferred getting higher
education
 made up 40%, in comparison with only 35% of
men
. The figure for females having higher
qualifications
 in Germany was far higher than its males. reaching 45%.
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