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The chart below shows the percentage of males and females with higher education qualifications in five countries in 2001.

the bar chart compares the proportion of males and females having higher
education
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qualifications
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 in 5 particular nations in the year 2001.
overall
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,
while
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 the figure for
women
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 pursuing higher
education
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 was higher than that of
men
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 in the US and Germany, Japan, Switzerland and Britain followed an opposite pattern in the given period. turning to the detail, Switzerland's
men
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 took higher
education
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 accounted for 45%, which was slightly higher than the figure for
women
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.
women
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 got higher
education
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qualifications
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 in japan was only 20%, compared to over 25% males students.
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, the percentage of
men
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 who had higher
qualifications
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 reached 35%,
whereas
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 the category of
women
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 was over a third.
in contrast
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, in the united states, the number of
women
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 who preferred getting higher
education
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 made up 40%, in comparison with only 35% of
men
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. The figure for females having higher
qualifications
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 in Germany was far higher than its males. reaching 45%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, qualifications, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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