The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year of 2009

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year of 2009
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The bar chart describes spending in five lifestyle categories for residents of four different nations in 2009. Looking from an
overall
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perspective, it is readily apparent that housing,
food
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, and transportation are the biggest expenses in nearly all countries, with those in the United States spending the most on their homes and those in
Japan
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the most on
food
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. Healthcare and clothing are smaller expenses and transportation is a greater expenditure than
food
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in only
Canada
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and the US. Expenditure on
food
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ranges from a low of 14% in the United States to a high of 22% for
Japan
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, with
Canada
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(15%) and the
UK
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(21%) in between. Housing costs represented at least a slightly higher percentage in all countries: 26% in the US, 24% in the
UK
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, 21% in
Japan
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, and 20% in
Canada
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. The numbers were more variable for transportation as
Canada
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stood at 20%, just above the USA at 19%
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the
UK
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and
Japan
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were lower at 15% and 10%, respectively. In terms of healthcare, by far the most is allocated for medical expenses in the USA (8%)
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all other countries are below 5%. For clothing,
Canada
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spends the most of their income (7%), followed by the
UK
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(6%),
Japan
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(4%), and
finally
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the United States (3%).
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, japan, canada, uk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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