In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays getting a high degree in education is a
must have
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for a better carrier opportunity.
Although
a lot of graduates are highly qualified, they do not work. There are numerous reasons why
this
happens and they will be explained in my essay
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also
some solutions will be suggested.
Firstly
, the
continious
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development of universities without taking into account which fields need employers in the country is a significant reason.
For example
, in my
country
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many medical schools were built because they have very high teaching fees and offer a lot of
gain
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in the department.
As a result
, much more doctors graduated from them, despite that the hospitals are full and need to move to other countries to work.
Moreover
, having a bachelor's degree seems to elevate the person's social status,
therefore
many jobs that do not require that are considered unpopular.
For instance
, jobs with a degree are
prefered
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preferred
rather than
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or other technical jobs.
Consequently
, students aim to get to universities regardless of the possible job opportunities in their city. One possible solution to
this
problem is teaching children in school that every job is needed and there is no classification in the persons taking any carrier.
Furthermore
, there should be
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control
to
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the universities by the government about the
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of positions they offer for each field. That will secure that there will not be more
employments
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employment
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than the requested positions. In conclusion, there are many persons highly qualified that are not employed.
This
is an increasing phenomenon and
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should be taken
immetiadly
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immediately
to address it. The society and
goverment
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government
should work together to make our world a better place for everyone.
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