The pie graphs below indicate the results of a survey of activities by children The first graph displays leisure and cultural activities that boys participate in, while the second graph displays activities where girls participate. Write a report describing the information displayed in these two pie graphs.
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The two pie charts
provides
information on the activities of children, Change the verb form
provide
while
the first chart illustrates the Boy’s Cultural and Leisure activities while
the second chart describes the leisure activities of girls
.
In the first pie chart
It may be observed that Add a comma
,chart
boys
spend most of their time
playing computer games which is
at 34%, basketball at 26%, Soccer at 17%, Change the verb form
are
skating
at 11%. Correct word choice
and skating
Similarly
, girls
spend their most time
on
dancing at 27% and spend less or reasonable Change preposition
apply
time
playing sports or other games i.e., Computer games at 16%, netball at 15%.
Comparatively, both boys
and girl
spend equal Fix the agreement mistake
girls
time
listening to music at 10% and while
boys
spend their
Change the word
the
least
Correct your spelling
last
time
reading at 2%, girls
spend more time
on
reading at 21%.
Change preposition
apply
Overall
, while
boys
are spending most of their playing, girls
spend most of their time
dancing and reading. It is seen that girls
have also
shown keen interest in gymnastics which is at 11%.Submitted by reddy_sowmya8110 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words girls, boys, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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