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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
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The line graph compares the supply of
goods
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 transported in the United Kingdom from 1974 to 2002 via
road
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,
water
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,
rail
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 and pipeline.
Overall
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,
road
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transportation
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 and
water
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transportation
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 carried more
quantity
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 of
goods
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 in the
UK
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 than the amount carried by pipelines and rails.
According to
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 the given data,
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initially
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 in 1974, more than 70
million
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 tonnes of products were transported to the
UK
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 on the
road
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while
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 around 40
million
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 tonnes were transported via
water
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 and
rail
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transportation
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. The least
quantity
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 of supplies (around 5
million
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 tonnes) was transported in pipelines in
this
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 same year. Over the year, the number of
goods
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 transported via
road
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 increased with some fluctuations and reached about 100
million
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tons
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 in 2002.
Water
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 transport was used more for transporting
goods
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 to the
UK
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 and except in 1998, the number of
goods
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 transported by the waterway kept on increasing and
finally
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 reached over 60
million
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tons
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 in 2002. The use of the
rail
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transportation
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 system for carrying
goods
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 to the
UK
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 got reduced as less
quantity
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 of
goods
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 were transported by in
rail
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 later years but
finally
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, the
quantity
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 reached 40
million
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tons
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 in 2002.
Finally
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,
goods
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 carried by pipelines increased over the year reaching over 20
million
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tons
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 in 2002.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, road, water, rail, transportation, quantity, uk, million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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