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The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The yielded two maps illustrate the science park look in 2008 and how it looks present
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that after advancement
place
 has more amenities and department In 2008, the northeast corner had cyber security places.
On
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In
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 the west direction of it was the IT
centre
while
on
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in
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 the north-west had a car park. Both are connected to cyber security by
road
,
moreover
, in the
centre
 of had business units. Grassland was on the north side of it
while
 woodland was on the south. The office and reception were next to each other and
was
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were
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 on the north side. Forgoing other
place
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places
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 had
road
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roads
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, one railway was on
thw
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the
 south. Currently,
road
 and railway
tracl
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track
 remain same
although
, made few changes. Alongside
road
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the road
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 new cycle path
built
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was built
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, new bus stop
also
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is also
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 now
in
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on
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 the east corner
road
. The innovative
centre
 takes the
place
 of the IT
centre
. The area was of cyber security now big it
also
cover
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covers
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grasssland
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grassland
grasslands
 and woodland space. The new station takes
place
 on the south railway track. Business units and
officers
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officers'
officer's
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 areas are unchanged. In the past, car parking shape now shapes.
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Furthermore
Furtgermore
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Furthermore
, In the
noryhwest
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northwest
 corner, a new university hub was developed, which use for research and development
this
 department is
joint
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joined
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 with the office
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words place, centre, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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