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The consumption of the world’s resources (oil, and water, etc.) is increasing at a dangerous rate. What are the causes and solutions?

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Nowadays, countries and local governments
are really care
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 about
environment
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environmental
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 problems. And one of the most
concerned
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concerning
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 issues is resource consumption.
This
eassy
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essay
easy
 will discuss the causes and solutions
of
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 the consumption of the world's
resources
.
To begin
 with, there are two main causes for
this
 problem.
Firstly
, industries
such
 as
car
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cars
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, electricity and food develop like crazy. Because
electricity
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the electricity
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 industry needs coal to produce, water is the most important factor to produce food and car need metal to manufacture, so when these industries grow, the need
of
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 natural
resources
 increases.
Finally
,
people
 do not save
energy
 and water. Natural
resources
 are limited, so if
people
 do not put
there
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their
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 mind
on
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 saving these
resources
, there is one day when they are gone and nothing
left
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 for human.
To deal
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 with
this
 problem, there are
also
 two main solutions. The first one is that countries and governments should encourage
people
 to use greener
energy
.
For example
,
energy
 from wind is unlimited, so we do not need to consume coal to produce
electrcity
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electricity
.
In addition
, green
energy
also
 reduces global warming because they release less
cabon
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carbon
 dioxide.
Finally
, Human is the main factor
for
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this
 problem.
While
people
 should be educated about the
dangerous
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dangers
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 of natural resource consumption,
goverments
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governments
government
also
 need to take
actions
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action
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 by
punish
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punishing
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people
 who
watse
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waste
 natural
resource
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resources
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 and raising their
price
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prices
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. In conclusion, without natural
resouce
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resources
resource
, our earth will go to the end soon.
People
 should be aware and take
actions
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action
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 before natural
resources
 are in danger.
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