The graphs below show the number of men and women in full and part-time employment in Australia between 1973 and 1993. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
chart is from the Labour Force Survey which illustrates the trend of males and females
in full and part-time jobs in Australia from 1973 to 1993.
The proportion of full-time males in 1993 increased significantly from 25% in the group of age
15 and hit 100% after 29, it gradually decreases and it was close to 0% in the age
65 or above, while
the same proportion was approximately 20% higher in 1973. The number of part-time males is very low, it only exceeded 20% among ages 15-19 in 1993 and it was under 10% in 1973 and other age
groups.
By comparison
, the figure for full-time females
starts from 20% in 1993 and 50% in 1973, it hit 60% at the age
of 25, there is a 20% decline in the group of 20-35, which increases then
that but gradually decreased to below 10% after the age
of 60. The proportion of females
part-time part is greater while
the highest number hits 35% in 1993, which was 20% higher than in 1973, it also
shows the overall
trend of part-time females
in 1993 is higher than in 1973.
In conclusion, people between the ages of 20 and 35 enjoy working full-time jobs the most, while
most of them begin to retire after 60.Submitted by 15280151 on
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