The bar chart below gives the results of a survey in a major company showing the attitudes of two groups of workers to various factors affecting work performance.

The bar chart below gives the results of a survey in a major company showing the attitudes of two groups of workers to various factors affecting work performance.
The diagram below illustrates the information about the attitudes of the two different types of
employee
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employees
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, which affects their work performance in a company.
Overall
, there are 10 reasons affecting the
wokers'
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workers'
performance during working hours and the young generation are seem to be affected more easily in the comparison with the older
group
.
To begin
with, as we can see, the total of people from the age of 18 to
30 year-old
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have a tendency of distracting
due to
the chance for personal development,the relaxed working environment, the promotion prospect and the job security is about doubled the number of workers in another
group
. With the factors
team
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spirit and work environment, there is no difference
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the two groups.
Moreover
, the amount of people in the
group
of 45 to
60 year-old
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is slightly over the
group
of adolescents in the factors of the competent boss and respect from colleagues.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • performance metrics
  • employee satisfaction
  • work-life balance
  • job security
  • recognition and rewards
  • survey results
  • attitude differences
  • workforce demographics
  • management strategies
  • company policies
  • employee engagement
  • professional development
  • compensation packages
  • motivation factors
  • survey respondents
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