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When choosing a job, the salary is the most important thing to consider. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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many individuals believe that the primary consideration when choosing a post is money, there are various factors that are applicable to choosing the job, mainly ,recognition, and advancement in career.Here are some viewpoints described here. First of all when choosing a profession expecting handsome wages, and hikes are added advantages, many companies provide transportation for their employee convenience to avoid latency to the place and expect more productivity .
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 if an employee travelled safely from home to the office without hazel, they give the best output in the work it gives eminence result, if they are not happy with salary what they got paid them always ,they think of switching the career which paid high.
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 many other streams like IT and software jobs, they may be highly paid but there will be so much pressure on them ,henceforth disturbance in the family, not spending enough
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 with family members,reflecting their arrogation of them, mythologically ,if a person works under pressure and more hour spending more point on work in his life ,very much few time with wife or children ,it aboard the space between them and relations will no longer be there. Some other factors to discuss
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 opting for the workplace, are transportation and food,If a company provides transport ,they will reach on
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, employees and will not be strained by reaching the office
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 huge traffic, they can workpiece fully ,If food is taken in consideration ,people may not be from the same city or town may come from a different location , so they might stay in the room may not possible to all members to prepare food and carry the lunch to office, if there is a cafeteria,it would help full for them. In ,conclusion even though money is essential for life, work-life balance is more important, so rather than working high paid jobs ,working with little less token of amount
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 fine which is good for the survival of the family and continuing the relationship.
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