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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. · What do you think the causes are? · What solutions can you suggest?

#city #traffic #congestion
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There is no doubt that
traffic
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are
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 becoming one of the
pollition
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pollution
 for a lot of
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 or huge towns, which are usually coming from the
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increasing
increasingly
numbers
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 of cars drivers. In
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problem
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 and suggest some solutions that might help to reduce its horrible impact on
people
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 and cities. One of the main causes of
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needs
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 to
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 transport vehicles, which can be only
handling
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 by
traveling
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 from
place
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 to
other
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cars
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 in most
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the
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cases.
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world
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 most of the important places that
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 have to go to daily
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work places
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, schools , universities and so on are far away from a lot of
people
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's homes which can be difficult to walk
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. In
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,
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problem
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 can be solved by offering a different public transport for citizens
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 as bus stations, underground metro and so on ,which can be
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 cheap to pay for so
people
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 will use it more often.
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, that
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 could help college students who can not afford a car
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 they are just normal students without enough
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financial
supports
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. Another
causes
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 that could have a role in
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problem
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 is that the number of
people
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are
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 almost impossible to manage especially in
center
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 cities,
that
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normally because of the service that are there like healthcare,
eduction
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education
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 services and more.
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 , that not a big
problem
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is
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if
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 the
goverment
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government
 manage to put policemen
everyewhere
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everywhere
 to reduce at least have of
impact
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the impact
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as well as
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 building new streets in the places where is the
traffic
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 are above normal.
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, the congestion of the
traffic
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 could be solved.
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, The
traffic
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of
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 any big town is
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 normal and easy to solve
by
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 the help of
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the government
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 to make new
steels
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 and
providing
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 new ways to travel easily.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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