The maps below show an idustrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an idustrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first picture shows the layout of an industrial
area
in the town of Norbiton, and the second shows
future
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the future
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development of the site. The two illustrations compare the layout and features of an industrial
area
in the town of Norbiton now, and in the future.
It is clear that
some main changes will be completely made in terms of the use of the
area
. There will be developments with regard to shops and housing. At present, we can see that there are eight factories, all of which will be demolished.
However
, It appears that the plan is to build seven housings for residents in various places. One will be built at the top of the
area
, three will be located in the
center
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along the road below the river, and the remaining will be built in the southeastern part of the
area
. It seems that the road will be expanded across the river to the north. There will be one smaller ring road near the medical
center
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centre
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. Some new buildings
such
as shops, medical
center
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centers
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,
playground
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playgrounds
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, and
school
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schools
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will be
also
constructed.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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