Do you think businesses should hire employees who will spend their entire lives working for the company? Explain why you agree or disagree. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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In the intelligent business world, people are just staff for tasks and projects.
However
, I believe that we are more than just
employee
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, we have our own lives and problems. So, I wonder, if
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employers should recruit
workers
which will be loyal to the job all the
time
or
no
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not
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. I have two points of view on
this
topic. On the one hand,
business
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businesses
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need to work, and for the success of the
company
, employees should do their best
in
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the
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work hours and be loyal to the place they are working.
For instance
, my team lead is working hard from 9 AM to 6 PM for her professional goals.
Also
, she became a team
lead
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with
time
. So, if you want to gain some positions at
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, you will need to stay with the
company
for a long
time
to be a manager or CEO. All in all, if to be
brutally
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honest, business need to have
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best and
loyal
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professionals to succeed,
that is
why recruiters have to hire
workers
who will stay with the
company
for as long as
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it
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possible.
On the other hand
, all of us
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are just
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human, and sometimes there is no other decision than leave the place you are working in. The best example could be my mom, who wanted to be a manager in her
company
. Unfortunately, her boss didn't see her
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this
position,
what
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was awful, because she deserved it. She decided to change the
company
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because
other
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work place
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gave her
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role of the manager, so she agreed.
To sum up
, employers should understand that they cannot have the same
workers
all the
time
, and sometimes, you need to let people go, as a
consequense
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consequence
company
can hire
even
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better person
instead
of
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one. In
conclusion
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I would like to say that, indeed, employers want all
theirs
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workers
to be loyal, but it's almost impossible, as
human
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humans
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sometimes want to have bigger positions or better
salary
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salaries
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. We
need
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try to make the perfect world, with
same
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workers
all the
time
, but it has no finish point.
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