you are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help - give details of your study plans - explain why you want to get a part-time job - suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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Hello Matt, It is been a long time no see you. I hope everything is okay and you are doing great. As a told you before, I applied to a master`s program in the UK for my academic career and you know, living in that country is my dream.

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, The University has submitted me 1 week ago and I am planning to move to the UK in 4 months.

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, I want to ask you some questions about living there. Living in the UK cost is so expensive

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I have to rent an apartment.

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is why I need to get a job as part-time

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, you are in the same condition there. You are both working and studying. When I was in university I was working as a server. I am thinking that I can be a server over there again. Do you know any restaurant or cafe any chance? If you know, Can you share their emails or information with me? I will be so appreciative. I am so excited to see you again Take care, Pinar.

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Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

184 words

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you are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help - give details of your study plans - explain why you want to get a part-time job - suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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