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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
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The line graph shows the number of
books
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 that people rented from four libraries during June, July, August and September in 2014. The pie chart illustrates the data about what kinds of
books
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 were borrowed during the same period in these four places. In general, what could be highlighted from the graph is that the number of
books
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 rented in Ryeslip experienced a sharp drop between June and September. Another interesting point is that biography
books
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 are the most popular type. Looking at the details, as regards Sutton Wood, it can be clearly seen that the number of
books
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were
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borrowed in
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 library fluctuated during the observed period. It started at 250
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 in June, increased slightly to approximately 280, experienced a gradual drop and
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 reached a peak at 300 in September. Talking about the pie chart, it can be mentioned that the other four kinds of
books
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 are not as widespread as the biography ones. They have approximately the same percentage.
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