The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie charts provide data on the proportion of
time
spent on different activities by
adults
in one country in two various years.
Overall
, in 1958
adults
spent most of their
time
sleeping and working with similar figures and
this
did not change in 2008
however
the ratio between them increased. In detail,
time
spent working by
adults
was 33% which was the highest percentage followed by the average sleeping proportion of 32%. The third activity was going out having a 19% ratio and the proportions of
time
spent relaxing at home, travelling to work
as well as
other interests or playing sports were 8%, 2%, and 6% respectively. In 2008, the proportion of
time
spent working and sleeping by elder people still made up the most amount of
time
they spent,
nevertheless
, the
time
spent working increased from 33% to 42% making up almost half of their
time
while
the percentage of
time
they sleep decreased to 25%. The
time
working
adults
spent commuting to work, relaxing at home and other interests or playing sports grew considerably to 8%, 13%, and 8%,
whereas
the
time
they spent with their friends or family going out decreased by more than three times falling to 6%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, adults with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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