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Many employers believe that good social skills are as important as good qualifications to succeed in a job, so they are employing people who are with good social skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that many employers believe that excellent
communication
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 abilities play a vital role in the workplace.
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 I accept that great soft
skills
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 lead to strong success, I partly agree with
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 idea and I will outline the reasons in the following essay. There are several main reasons why it could be argued that companies should employ those with great
communication
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skills
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.
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, a majority of firms rely on maintaining relations with customers and those who excel at
communication
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 may have a positive impact on the rate of customer satisfaction.
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, advanced brands are likely to hire employees with persuasive and understandable talking abilities.
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, consumers are more satisfied with their services and are likely to buy more products.
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, good social
skills
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 contribute to better teamwork at workplaces, which improves the effectiveness of a team.
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, if there are different opinions between co-workers, the conflict may be eased easily.
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, I would agree with those who believe employers should not only employ people based on their social
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 is mainly because there are some jobs that do not require a lot of
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,
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 as operators and clerical workers. Companies have no right to reject people with outstanding working
skills
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 but who suffer from social anxiety disorders.
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, everyone has their own strengths. Companies should hire people who meet the educational requirements and those with practical working
skills
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 so that the company can operate better. In conclusion, I believe that both sides of the argument have merits.
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, I believe various factors can be considered by employers to achieve the best results.
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