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In some places, teenagers are encouraged to get part-time job while they are still in school. Do the advantages of teenagers working outweigh the disadvantages ?

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Nowadays,it is becoming more usual for youngsters in high school to take a part-time job during their studies. In
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 both merits and demerits of
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 phenomenon would be analysed. I personally am of the belief that the plus points eclipse the drawbacks. On the one hand, there are considerable benefits to working
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 era with the big economical issues during the
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 with the expenses of studying in higher education and colleges. More importantly, starting work at younger ages helps teens
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learn responsibility and confidence with the taste of independency which is very important for their personality growth. From another angle, it is not without pitfalls for a number of justifications. Primarily, working
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 even for part-time jobs could be easily distracted by their job or they could be tired of work for spending time on their studies.
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, some workplaces could be dangerous for these inexperienced juveniles near abusive employers in some cases. From my perspective, working
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 appears to have more benefits than disadvantages as can be seen in different academic research
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 a study at the University of Bermingham in the UK. In conclusion, there are pros like earning money and personality growth of working from a young age
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 it shouldn't be forgotten that there are some cons like the distraction of study or abusive workplaces in case that I personally think they are less probable in common.
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