The graph below shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph describes the
propotion
trends of usage of recent technology in people's homes in Correct your spelling
proportion
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th e
UK.
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the
Overall
, the trends were upward regarding all technologies while
there was a change of
the order in the middle of the period. As regards the mobile phone, the access rate Change preposition
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was
surpassed the home computer in 1999. After that, the percentage Unnecessary verb
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conteniued
going up and ended up second largest percentage Correct your spelling
continued
while
there were a few climb rate fluctuations.
It is noticeable that the internet access percentage rose steadly
4-fold over 30% since 1999 Correct your spelling
steadily
although
the access rate of CD
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the CD
a CD
player
and home Fix the agreement mistake
players
computer
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computers
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has climed
climed
about 20% since 1997. Correct your spelling
climbed
claimed
However
, the momentum of increase
declined at the start of 2001.Correct article usage
the increase
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