The graph below shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph describes the
propotion
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proportion
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trends of usage of recent technology in people's homes in
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UK.
Overall
, the trends were upward regarding all technologies
while
there was a change
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the order in the middle of the period. As regards the mobile phone, the access rate
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surpassed the home computer in 1999. After that, the percentage
conteniued
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continued
going up and ended up second largest percentage
while
there were a few climb rate fluctuations. It is noticeable that the internet access percentage rose
steadly
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steadily
4-fold over 30% since 1999
although
the access rate of
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player
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and home
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computers
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claimed
about 20% since 1997.
However
, the momentum of
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declined at the start of 2001.
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