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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts give
the
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apply
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information about the percentage of
people
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 in America,
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who consuming
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consuming
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consume
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Sodium
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, Saturated Fat, and Added
sugar
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 in their daily meals.
Overall
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, American
people
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 have their dinner, which contains
Sodium
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 the most, followed by Saturated Fat.
However
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, breakfast shows a
balance
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balanced
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 pattern in three nutrients.
Also
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,
people
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 have their typical meals containing lots of Added
sugar
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 in snacks. Looking at the pie charts more closely, the percentage of
people
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have
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who have
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 their lunch and dinner consuming more
Sodium
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 than Saturated fat, which accounted for 43% and 37%
in
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of
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 dinner, 29% and 26%
in
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of
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 lunch.
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, the proportion of breakfast consumes three types of nutrients taking up 14% in
Sodium
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, and 16% both
in
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apply
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Saturated fat and Added
sugar
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.
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 but not least, it should be mentioned
about
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apply
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added
sugar
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. Added
sugar
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 takes up the vast majority of
proportion
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the proportion
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 in snacks,
accounted
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accounting
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 for 42%.
Nevertheless
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, the other three meals just take up about 20%
in
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of
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 these nutrients.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, sodium, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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