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The diagrams below show the changes of a town called Bridgetown 1700 and 2000. Compare and summarize the changes of the Bridgetown.

The diagrams below show the changes of a town called Bridgetown 1700 and 2000. Compare and summarize the changes of the Bridgetown.
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The diagrams give information on the renovation of a town name, Bridgetown in the year 1700 and 2000. A period of 300 years.
Overall
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, there have many changes between 1700 and 2000 like schools, marketplace and bridges. In the first photo, it can seem that there had a castle near to marketplace and there had only one bridge.
In addition
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, in the first ,diagrams there had many land farms and no railway in the year 1700.
On the other hand
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, the town was very developed in 2000 as can be seen in the second diagram. Because there had many things was changed like new school for children and bigger marketplace in the Bridgetown.
Moreover
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, there had railways and two bridges in the town. The river is not a thing that changed. From 1700 and 2000,
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the
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was very develop
Change the verb form
was very developed
was very developing
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 and grow
up to
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into
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Correct article usage
a
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 big city.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure
  • residential area
  • commercial district
  • land use
  • expansion
  • transformation
  • modernization
  • industrial
  • recreational facilities
  • housing development
  • transportation networks
  • demolished
  • constructed
  • preserved
  • evolution
  • adaptation
  • architectural styles
  • cityscape
  • historical preservation
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