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The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.

The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.
#line #trends #terms #employment #usa #millions #predictions #future
The graphic shows the
employment
 trends and predicts the future based on the past
years
.
Over
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Overall
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all
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,all
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 we can see that the services had a big rise over the
years
,
on the
contrary
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,contrary
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the
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agriculture
 went down gradually. And
lastly
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,lastly
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 the manufacturing had a sharp up and a sharp down. Starting with
agriculture
, in 1975
wher
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where
 80
millions
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million
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 of
employment
, the number stayed steady until 1977 when it decreased
little
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by little
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 more than 40
millions
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million
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. From 1979 to 1980 it kept slightly going down. The predictions say that
the
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apply
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agriculture
 will keep falling in the next few
years
.
On the other hand
, the services remain steady for the first four
years
, but after
that
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,that
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 the line climbs rapidly, to a top prediction of 90 million
employees
.
The manufacturing
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Manufacturing
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employment
 stayed constant for the first two
years
, after that it started to increase slowly, until 1979 when it had a significant rise to 50 million
employees
 in 1980, but the rise quickly had the same impact dropping. The drop is predicted to
last
 until 2025. In conclusion, the
employment
 lines in the USA are very variable depending on the job. But concretely the predictions for 2025
has
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have
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 an approximate of 10 million
employees
 in manufacturing and
agriculture
, and 90
employees
 in services.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, years, agriculture, employees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "trends" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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