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The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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In 1995
people
 born inside
australia
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 were so much less than
people
 born outside
australia
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were
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where
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 towns in
ausralia
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Australia
 were much more than town outside of
australia
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 same in a side
afact
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affect
 rural
areas
 in
australia
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 are less than rural
areas
 outside
australia
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 by 10% , Now in 2010
people
 born in
australia
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 are still less than
people
 born outside of
australia
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 were in 2010 towns and rural
areas
 in
australia
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 were even but outside of
australia
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 town were more than the rural
areas
 so the rural
areas
 outside of
australia
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 decreased a lot since 1995 , what we understand from
that is
 that urban
developend
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developed
development
 a great
stratege
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strategy
 of increasing the population and getting rid of the rural
areas
where in
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wherein
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 the other side
australia
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 did not find a solution to increase both the population and town's which is quite
intresting
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interesting
 because
australia
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 is
such
 a big country that holds so potential but they never worked hard in both
growth
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growths
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 of
contry
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country
 or population.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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