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The table illustrates the money cost on various consumer products in different countries, which are Germany, Italy, France and Britain.

The table illustrates the money cost on various consumer products in different countries, which are Germany, Italy, France and Britain.
The table illustrates the
money
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 cost
on
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of
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 various consumer products in different countries, which are Germany, Italy, France and Britain.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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on
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in
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 purchasing distinct consumer goods, British people are the greatest main force among these four countries,
while
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other
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the other
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 three countries are on average level. People in Britain spent most on photographic film at the cost of about 170,000 pounds sterling, which is the highest in the table.
By contrast
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,
German
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Germany
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costed
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costs
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least
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the least
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 money
on
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for
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 almost all kinds of products, especially
on
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apply
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photographic film, less than 150,000 pounds, which is the lowest figure in the chart. The figures for spending on toys were
same
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the same
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 in France and Italy, at nearly 160,000.
However
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, French people spent more on CDs and photographic film than Italians,
while
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 Italians spent more on personal stereos, tennis racquets and perfumes.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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