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The bar charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The bar charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The given bar chart illustrates
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 of UK
graduate
 and postgraduate
students
 in 2008.
Overall
, it can be noticeable that
majority
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the majority
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 of both
graduate
 and postgraduate
students
 continued their
study
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studies
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,
while
small
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a small
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majority
 of
students
 took up voluntary work. Almost half of the
graduate
students
 left unemployed
as well as
 postgraduate
students
.
According to
 the bar chart, slightly more than
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half of the
graduate
students
 took up
part-time
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a part-time
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job
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jobs
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 after leaving college, which is 17,735,
while
overwhelming
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the overwhelming
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majority
 of
postgraduates
, which is 2,535 took it up. Voluntary work was done by
insignificant
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an insignificant
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 minority (3500) of
graduate
students
,
whereas
 only 345 of
postgraduates
 did it after college. It can be seen that
significant
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a significant
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majority
 of graduates (29,665) continued their education
as well as
the
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2725
of
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postgraduates
.
While
 slightly more than
a
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half of graduates stayed unemployed, approximately
same
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the same
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 proportion of
postgraduates
 remained unemployed.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduate, students, majority, postgraduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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