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The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for thte future.

The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for thte future.
#line #trends #terms #employment #usa #millions #predictions #thte #future
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 analyzing a chart where the
employments
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employment
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 are divided
in
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into
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 three
diferent
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different
 Job Fields. The first one is the change in manufacturing, the second one
services
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is services
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 on the
last
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agriculture
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. The chart is based on
datas
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data
,
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 and predictions. The three
diferent
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different
 categories have very distinct things and predictions. Since the market has changed constantly
on
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 the past 50 years.
also
, we can observe that the Jobs mentioned do not have a
co-relation
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correlation
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 between them. taking into account that the frequency isn’t matched. In the case of manufacturing and services is highly curios, in the lapse of 1975 and 1980 the trend
where
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 mostly the same, but standing the 80s,
manufactured
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 decreased dramatically,
while
 the
servise fied
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service field
 went up impressively. If we look at agriculture the scenario had been awful, as the amount of production is decreasing, since 1975
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the predictions
also
 indicate that it will continue to fall down. As finishing the report,
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agriculture in the
united
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United
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 States of America has a negative future. If we talk about the, but in the other hand services are going to the sky’s and it will continue
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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