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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the value of five types of
products
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is
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exported by a country between 2015 and 2016.
Moreover
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, the table
give
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 information about the proportion change in these five different
products
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 exports in given periods.
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, the vast majority of export earnings
comes
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 from
petroleum
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products
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 and engineered goods,
whereas
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the
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 minor
of
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export value is attributed to
textiles
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.
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, the percentage change in
textiles
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 values significantly goes up from 2015 to 2016. Looking at the bar graph more closely, the value of
Petroleum
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Products
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, engineered goods and
textiles
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 shows an increasing trend.
Petroleum
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products
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 plus engineered
products
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equals
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 about 120$
billion
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 to 30$
billion
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.
Then
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textiles
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 skyrocket from about 25$
billion
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 to 30$
billion
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.
However
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, agricultural
products
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 remain stable accounting for approximately 30$
billion
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.
Also
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, gems and
jewelry
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jewellery
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decrease
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decreased
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 to 40$
billion
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.
Last
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 but not least, the table shows that
textiles
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 shoot up about 15.24% for the percentage change in values.
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,
petroleum
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products
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 and agricultural
products
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 only raise slightly, taking up below 5% from 2015 to 2016. Ultimately, gems and
jewelry
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jewellery
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 plummet about 5.18%, which is the only category
show
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showing
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 a downward trend.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, petroleum, textiles, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • economic sector
  • percentage change
  • increment
  • decrement
  • fluctuation
  • trend analysis
  • year-on-year comparison
  • significant growth/decline
  • stagnation
  • market dynamics
  • fiscal repercussions
  • trade balance
  • competitive advantage
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