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The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie charts show the adults who spent time on different
activities
Use synonyms
 in 1958 and 2008.
Such
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 as Sleeping, travelling, working, going out, and other
activities
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. The percentage of working, relaxing at home and travelling to work rise compared to 1958
furthermore
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 the fraction of other
activities
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, sleeping and going out with family and friends dropped the way adult spend their time. In 1958 the highest number of senior persons spending their time working
hence
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 in 2008
also
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 increased from 33% to 42%. Other
activities
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 remain still same at 6% in 1958
as well as
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 in 2008.
However
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, the percentage of sleeping diminished from 32% to 25% in 2008.
Moreover
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, going out with family or friends fraction in 1958 was 19% and decreased to 6% in 2008. Travelling to work was 2% and it rise by 4% compared with 1958. They started to relax at home more, which resulted in
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% growth contrasted that in 1958.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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