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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Pacakaging
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Packaging
 of commodities plays a pivotal role in increasing its sales credibility because
number
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a number
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 of
massess
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masses
 buy products that simply
captures
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capture
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 their attention. A group of
public
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the public
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 adheres to the notion that producers and retailers should be obliged to reduce packaging,
however
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 some
people
 opine that consumers should avoid buying products with redundant packages. In my perspective, manufacturers should be held responsible to stop unwanted packaging of the product because
people
 cannot control packing as they are the end users. Producers of the goods and commodities are the prime source who design packages or are primarily linked with package designing.
Therefore
, they are more responsible than other
people
 involved in the entire process of
byuing
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buying
 and selling for reducing the
amount
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number
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 of boxes and wrappers used to secure the actual product. Supermarkets can actually play a part by not accepting unnecessarily wrapped items for sale but they cannot re-do the process because of certain obligations related to food
handelling
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handling
 and safety.
Moreover
, shops can be converted into storage rooms where everything
is
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can be stored in bulk
inspite
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in spite
 of small packets. For an instance, alike petrol, cooking oil can be sold
through
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by
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 installing pipelines at supermarkets and customers can carry their own
canesters
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canisters
casters
everytime
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every time
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 they buy. Consumers can
also
 play a part in reducing the problem of excess packaging by being rational towards nature.
People
 should
also
 avoid buying products with multiple layers of packaging stuff. It is not judicious to blame others all the time, every single individual is responsible for their actions and
havoc
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the havoc
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 they are causing by accepting everything.
Now-a-days
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Nowadays
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 many refills are available,
people
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and people
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 should imbibe the habit of refilling and reusing in place of repurchasing. To
examplify
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exemplify
, empty
bottels
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bottles
 of body wash can be easily refilled with available refill pouches
in contrast
 to buying a whole plastic
bottel
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bottle
 again. To recapitulate, in my
opinion
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 to mitigate
with
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apply
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the problem of packaging everybody should play a part. Someone, whether
customer
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a customer
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 or manufacturer has to draw a line and should firmly stick to it.
However
, I reckon producers are more responsible than customers in order to stop excessive packaging.
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