The process diagram illustrates that in Australian town in what way rainwater is assembled in order to use as potable water.

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, it is obvious that rainwater is collected from all

house

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by the gutter afterwards it is passing all processes which make rainwater turn

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into

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drinkable

water

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This

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recycle

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process

is consist

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of several essential stages (

water

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filter, storage,

water

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treatment and chemicals).

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of all rain which

fall

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on the rooftop and

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rainwater which comes through

drain

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the drain

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is filtered and it

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on by tube to store in a

water

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tank. continue by pipe in order to treat

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where all

water

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remove

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removed

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its

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from its

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impurities. In

this

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stage

water

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recycle

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recycled

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to drink

water

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and

then

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the

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top of the

water

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tank

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apply

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turn

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turned

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to drink

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with chemicals. From

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point, when the

water

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is already

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ready to use it is

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up by helping with

underground

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an underground

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tube to each house where people can use

water

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in their daily life.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

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2 paragraphs

147 words

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