The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart indicates how UK citizens of different ages spend money on Food and drinks, Restaurants and Hotels, and
Entertainment
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in 2004. In general, the expenses of UK residents for necessities
such
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as Food and Drink depend on the age group.
For example
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, people under 30 spend less in
this
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category than the other three age groups given in the graph.
For example
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, in 2004 the spending on Food and Drink for people under 30 and between 31-45 years was about 6% and 13% of the total spending respectively.
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,
Entertainment
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obtained more importance for UK citizens who are 46-60 and 61-75 years old, as their expenditures for attractions were about 14% and 23% respectively.
Moreover
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, the chart shows that the amount of money spent on
entertainment
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activities rose significantly as people become older.
However
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, citizens who are 76+ old cut their spending for
this
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category and use about 13% of the budget for
entertainment
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "for example".
Vocabulary: Replace the words entertainment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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