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he bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

he bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
barchart
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bar chart
 shows that world
illeteracy
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illiteracy
literacy
rates
 in six
differents
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different
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region
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regions
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 and
categorized
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are categorized
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 for both
of
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apply
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two
gender
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genders
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. The most illiteracy
rates
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rate
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has
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as
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 South
Asia
.
Although
 both
of
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apply
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two genders.
Also
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,Also
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 female illiteracy
rates
 are more than male in each
region
. The female
illeteracy
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illiteracy
are
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is
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 increasing from developed
countries
 to South
Asia
. But male
illeteracy
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illiteracy
 are different increasing
because
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ofbecause
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 two
region
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regions
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, Latin American,Caribbean and Sub-Saharan Africa. Especially
Latin
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in Latin
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American
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America
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,Caribean male
illeteracy
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illiteracy
literacy
rates
 are almost equal
female
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to female
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illetracy
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illiteracy
literacy
rates
. The
differents
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different
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 are bigger between male and female
illeteracy
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illiteracy
literacy
rates
 in
these three
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this three region
these three regions
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region
, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South
Asia
.
Also
 in
these three
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this three region
these three regions
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region
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,region
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 almost
a
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apply
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half of
female
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females
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 can not read. The male
illeteracy
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illiteracy
literacy
rates
 are almost zero in the developed
countries
also
 female
illeteracy
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illiteracy
literacy
rates
 are
same
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the same
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 in the developed
countries
.
The
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In the
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developed
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Developed
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Countries
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countries
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, Latin American/Caribean and East
Asia
/Oceania, in
these three
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this three region
these three regions
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region
,
total
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the total
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 number of
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illiteracy
illeteracy
 less than only Sub-Saharan Africa.
In addition
,
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illeteracy, rates, region, asia, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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