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he bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

he bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
barchart
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bar chart
 shows that world
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illeteracy
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illiteracy
literacy
rates
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 in six
differents
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different
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region
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regions
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 and
categorized
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are categorized
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 for both
of
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two
gender
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genders
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. The most illiteracy
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rates
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rate
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has
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as
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 South
Asia
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.
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of
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apply
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two genders.
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Also
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,Also
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 female illiteracy
rates
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 are more than male in each
region
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. The female
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illeteracy
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illiteracy
are
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is
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 increasing from developed
countries
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 to South
Asia
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. But male
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illeteracy
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illiteracy
 are different increasing
because
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ofbecause
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 two
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region
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regions
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, Latin American,Caribbean and Sub-Saharan Africa. Especially
Latin
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in Latin
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American
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America
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,Caribean male
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illeteracy
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illiteracy
literacy
rates
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 are almost equal
female
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to female
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illetracy
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illiteracy
literacy
rates
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. The
differents
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different
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 are bigger between male and female
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illeteracy
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illiteracy
literacy
rates
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 in
these three
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this three region
these three regions
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region
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, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South
Asia
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.
Also
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 in
these three
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this three region
these three regions
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region
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,region
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 almost
a
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apply
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half of
female
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females
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 can not read. The male
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illeteracy
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illiteracy
literacy
rates
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 are almost zero in the developed
countries
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also
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 female
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illeteracy
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illiteracy
literacy
rates
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 are
same
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the same
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 in the developed
countries
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.
The
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developed
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Developed
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Countries
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countries
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, Latin American/Caribean and East
Asia
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/Oceania, in
these three
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this three region
these three regions
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region
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,
total
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the total
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 number of
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illiteracy
illeteracy
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 less than only Sub-Saharan Africa.
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,
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illeteracy, rates, region, asia, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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