The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.

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The two pie charts give information on the proportion of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016. A period of 16 years.

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, it can seem that the total of

Healthcare

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and

Education

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in 2000 and 2016 were similar.

In addition

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, the total of Agriculture was highest in 2000. In ,contrast construction was lowest in 2000. And in 2016,

healthcare

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and

education

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were the highest and the lowest in government. The first pie charts provided information in 2000 in which the highest proportion was Agriculture at 24 per

cent

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. Followed by

healthcare

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and

education

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and leisure and hospitality were 17 per

cent

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respectively. The Second pie chart shows data in 2016 that

healthcare

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and

education

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were highest was 17 per

cent

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. Followed by trade, United and transportation, leisure and hospitality were 16 per

cent

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and 14 per

cent

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The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.

Some people think that everyone has the right to have access to university education, and that governments should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Some cultures think old people are of higher value than the youth, while other cultures value the youth more. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that in many cities around the world there are constant traffic jams. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from owning cars.

Music has always been and continues to be the universal language of mankind. To what extent do you agree or disagree?