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Some people believe that the country would benefit a lot from a large number of young people who enter into university; however, others think that the large number of people receiving the education of university only leads to graduate unemployment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #country #university #education #graduate #unemployment
There is no doubt that the youth of a
country
 is the key to its development.
Although
 few political critics argue that
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 number of college graduates
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 to the issue of
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 of
jobs
 in the market, many believe that a nation can thrive if it has a large educated pool of generation supporting it. I completely agree with the latter point of view. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both
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views and explain with examples certain factors
such
 as
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 of the
country
, to my support. It is a known fact that unemployment is one of the biggest challenges that the world is fighting today.
Due to
this
 issue,
the
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college
students
 are
loosing
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 faith in the system and themselves, as they are forced to do odd
jobs
 despite having a decent college education. Take
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 instance, the engineers who are working as servers at cafes because they do not have
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 work opportunities in the market. A recent survey demonstrated that every year, more than 43%
university
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 pass-out
students
 suffer the same fate of employment.
Further
, since most of these
students
 take loans for their studies,
thus
 inability to pay these loans
create
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 a lot of bad debt for the
country
.
However
, the problem of employment is not something
unsurmountable
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.
On the other hand
, we should remember that an educated population can take a
country
 to any desired height. Educated youth can become leaders and politicians who can drive their
country
 in a better direction.
For example
, during the pandemic time, a
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 leader was required to understand the impact of the situation and take progressive steps,
while
 ensuring the safety of its people.
Further
, these
students
 can
propell
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propel
 the growth of the economy multi-folds by contributing in the field of engineering, space research, finance and
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. They can be the ones to create more
jobs
 in the economy and
tacke
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take
tackle
 the problem of unemployment. If there were not enough
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 people in the system, a
country
 would not sustain the economical and
polictical
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political
 challenges in the global ecosystem. In conclusion,
while
 an unemployed pool of
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candidates
 may be
percieved
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perceived
 as a burden on available
jobs
, a
country
 can reap far more benefits
such
 as increased contribution
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economy
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the economy
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 and
well being
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well-being
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 of the citizens. .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innovation
  • economic growth
  • research and development
  • competitive
  • global stage
  • quality of life
  • critical thinking skills
  • worldview
  • oversupply
  • job market mismatch
  • graduate unemployment
  • underemployment
  • vocational training
  • technical skills
  • skilled trades
  • functional workforce
  • balanced approach
  • aligning education
  • market needs
  • diverse educational pathways
  • lifelong learning
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