The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart gives information on the
proporion
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proportion
of students divided into two genders who passed their high school
competency
exams which consist of 7 subjects from 2010 to 2011.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the three major subjects which have
high
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a high
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percentage of
competency
of both genders are foreign languages, mathematics and computer science.
Also
, the
overall
competency
of
girls
was higher than that of
boys
except
to
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for
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geography. Looking at the graph closely, the percentage of
girls
'
competency
in
a
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the
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subject of computer science was the largest at 56.3% followed by that of mathematics and foreign languages at 49.2% and 47.4% respectively.
Conversely
, the figure for geography in the same gender accounted for the lowest proportion recording 20.1% which was nearly
two thirds
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of that for
boys
at 30.4%.
On the other hand
,
boys
showed their highest
competency
in
a
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the
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subject of mathematics marking 48.4% despite the figure
was
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being
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lower than that for
girls
. With regards to geography, it was the only subject
that
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in that
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boys
made higher
competency
than
girls
. When it comes to chemistry,
boys
indicated the smallest
competency
which was approximately half of that for
girls
at 14.1% and 30.2% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words competency, girls, boys with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Competency exams
  • High school
  • Pass rate
  • Disparity
  • Performance gap
  • Subject-specific analysis
  • Year-to-year progression
  • Regression
  • Overall trends
  • Significant
  • Notably wide/narrow
  • Conclusion
  • Observations
  • Consistencies
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