The bar chart shows the information of the number of volunteers and paid workers in 4 different roles in the sports sector of an Australian town in 2015.

The bar chart shows the information of the number of volunteers and paid workers in 4 different roles in the sports sector of an Australian town in 2015.
The given bar chart illustrates the quantity of paid and unpaid workers involved in 4 sports roles namely: coaching, referees, therapists and other sections in a town in Australia in 2015. In general, the number of coaching volunteers was the highest
figure
. Meanwhile, there were not many changes in the quantity of paid workers among the 4 roles. Looking at the chart for more detail, more than 70
people
were unpaid to work in coaching, which was the highest number of individuals, followed by other sections with nearly 60
people
.
Besides
, the
figure
for therapists volunteers was around 45
people
,
while
those for referees were lower (about 30
people
).
On the other hand
, nearly 50
people
interested
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in working in other roles in
this
sports sector,
while
the quantity of paid workers who became coachers halved
this
figure
for volunteers in
this
field (45
people
). Those statistics for referees and therapists witnessed the same
figure
at around 40 individuals.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • volunteers
  • paid workers
  • roles
  • sports sector
  • Australian town
  • duties
  • motivations
  • significance
  • contribution
  • professionalism
  • specialization
  • sustainability
  • distribution
  • trends
  • volunteerism
  • community engagement
  • professional development
  • accessibility
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