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some people think that all university student showd study whatever they like others belive that they should. -only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful. in the future, such asthose related to science and technology.

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Introduction
We live in
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 modern society and most of youthful want to continue their education
in
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the
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university
further
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 some people
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believe
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 that all university
Student
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Students
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 should study whatever they like others think that
adolesent
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adolescent
adolescents
 should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future. The following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument.
Body · 1
At the
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first,
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I strongly
belive
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believe
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 that
the
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all pupils must
to
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have
opportunity
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an opportunity
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that
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they achieve whatever
anything their
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they
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 like
in
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the
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university. Because when
puplis
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pupils
 are
Studing
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Studying
 their
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favourite
 topics, they will
ecxited
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excited
.
In
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addition
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 collegian can
studying
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study
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 hard more
an
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and
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 more
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then
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 they will expert in their field. But the below side works are full of
applicant
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applicants
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 and some Lose job
opportunity
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opportunities
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.
Body · 2
On the contrary
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about
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to
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 the second reason view,
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while
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apply
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people should
to
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earn
in particular
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 training. I think We will have a
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depressed
 community because. They
maybe
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may be
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 to abhor their schooling.
According to
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i
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 disagree
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this
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with this
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 point of view
on the other hand
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 collegian can easily get jobs
it is clear that
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 they will not have competition in the nation and there will be all kinds of
specialist
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specialists
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 in the community.
Conclusion
To
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sum
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 up
i
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belive
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believe
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 that the territory
have
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 to balance between
graduate
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graduation
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 and job opportunity on
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top of that pupils can
to
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apply
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have a
particuler
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particular
 fondness for studying
what
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anything. Frankly
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i
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I
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 think when people
allowe
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allow
allowed
earns
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to earn
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 all
typs
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types
 of technology better than
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at another
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another
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other
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 sight.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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