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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in a country in two years

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in a country in two years
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Depicted by two
pie
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charts
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, one can compare information
the
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 energy
production
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 in a specific country in two different years. Starting with the graph on the right, which illustrates the energy
production
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 in 1995, coal has the highest amount of
production
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porcentage
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percentage
.
However
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, in the
chart
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 on the left (that shows information from the year 2005), gas is the element that represents the largest
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porcentage
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percentage
 of the
chart
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. As for the lowest energy
production
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, “other” is the category taking the least
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porcentage
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percentage
 in
both
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charts
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.
Further
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 analyzing, when comparing
both
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of
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charts
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, though they
reprecent
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represent
 different years,
both
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 are considerably similar. Indeed, in
both
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charts
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, coal and gas take up the largest amount of the
pie
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chart
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.
Nonetheless
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,
petroleo
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had a higher
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porcentage
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percentage
 in 1995 than in 2005. As for nuclear, its
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porcentage
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percentage
 on the charge
doesnt
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doesn't
 fluctuate a lot, it goes from 6.40% in 1985 to 10.10% in 2005.
Overall
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 most
porcentages
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percentages
percentage
 remained very similar throughout the years. As mentioned, the only
notisable
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noticeable
chang
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change
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 is that in 2005 gas has the highest
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porcentage
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percentage
,
whereas
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in
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,in
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 1995, the largest
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porcentage
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percentage
 in the
pie
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chart
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 was represented by coal.
However
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, in the grand scheme, when looking at what was
ilustrated
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illustrated
 in
both
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pie
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charts
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, the materials used in 1995 and 2005 are
recenblant
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resemblant
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, charts, production, porcentage, chart, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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