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You have eaten at a restaurant and it was such a terrible experience that you have decided to inform the manager by letter of what happened and that you want your money back. Things to include: – Facts. You need to be concise but explain what happened. – Polite. No one responds to insults. – Outline what you wish from this. What do you want to happen? – Firmness. You want to be taken seriously.

#restaurant #manager #money #facts #insults #outline #firmness
I am writing
this
 letter to bring to your attention a terrible experience I had in your restaurant
last
 weekend. I had a dinner planned with my family as it was my mother's birthday. I booked a table for six about a week ago as I was well aware of the fact that the restaurant is always busy during the weekends. But when we came to dine in, the receptionist informed us that there is no booking and we will have to wait for the table. After waiting for fifteen minutes we got the table and ordered vegetarian cuisines.
Although
 we had to wait for twenty minutes to get our food we got a non-vegetarian curry which never asked and it disappointed us. I understand that your restaurant is very busy during peak hours but you should have enough staff to provide the services for which the customer is paying. I want you to take some action on the staff and
also
 process my refund for the same. You can reach out to me on my mobile number - 1234567890 or you can mail to the same address. I will expect your response as soon as possible. Regards, Sachin Sharma
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